Tone: Direct, no-nonsense, and relatable. The "YOU" emphasis drives the accountability home.
Structure: Clean segmentation with bold headings and checklist-style advice makes it digestible.
Voice: Speaks like a seasoned trader who's been through the grind — very effective for credibility.
Optional Enhancements:
1. Hook Optimization (first 2 lines): Consider tightening it slightly for even more punch:
> “Every time you buy a coin, it dumps?
Feel like the market’s out to get you?”
2. Title Suggestion:
The current one is strong, but here are a few variations you could test:
“Crypto Trading Sucks (Unless You Learn This First)”
“Why You're Losing Money in Crypto (And How to Stop)”
“The Crypto Trap: What No One Tells You Before You Lose It All”
3. Add a killer closing line:
Something that reinforces the mindset shift:
> “Most lose in crypto not because it’s rigged — but because they play it like a casino instead of a business.”